09-17-2017, 11:11 PM
Yes. If there were two bars of something slightly dissonant, maybe around 0:40 in your recording, that would help. Or if something broke the arpeggios for a short while, then returned to them. I believe that would add some development to the piece. I think it's the lack of development that made the piece sound overly simplistic. You know, having a definite B part or a definite bit of call and response or deviation and return in there would improve it a lot.
