07-04-2017, 07:33 PM
Better, but still not enough breathing in there.
Consider that a woodwind player has to breathe. Take eight or sixteen bars of melody and put a pause at the end where the recorder doesn't play. Like at 0:19 for example. Just let it sit for a moment with just the lute before continuing. Let each melody, each motif, each section sink in for a moment. Then let the melody begin anew. Make the pauses clearly audible.
The melody is still not well structured enough. Have varied note lengths and pauses. It sounds a little mechanical currently. The lute is doing a lot of eighth notes? Don't make the recorder do the same as the lute. I think you just need to listen a lot more to real instruments. A real player can't do this continuous stream of quick notes on a woodwind for a minute. Take a really deep breath and notice how long it takes. Two to five seconds. That's how long a woodwind player needs to pause just to breathe. Otherwise he goes blue in the face.
There are some good melodic ideas in there. Just take it a lot slower. The recorder doesn't need to play continuously all the time. The lute can, because a lute player doesn't need to stop picking in order to breathe...
Try some longer notes, some shorter ones, and let the recorder pause from time to time. Just take the hand from the keyboard for a moment. The silence between the notes is important.
Consider that a woodwind player has to breathe. Take eight or sixteen bars of melody and put a pause at the end where the recorder doesn't play. Like at 0:19 for example. Just let it sit for a moment with just the lute before continuing. Let each melody, each motif, each section sink in for a moment. Then let the melody begin anew. Make the pauses clearly audible.
The melody is still not well structured enough. Have varied note lengths and pauses. It sounds a little mechanical currently. The lute is doing a lot of eighth notes? Don't make the recorder do the same as the lute. I think you just need to listen a lot more to real instruments. A real player can't do this continuous stream of quick notes on a woodwind for a minute. Take a really deep breath and notice how long it takes. Two to five seconds. That's how long a woodwind player needs to pause just to breathe. Otherwise he goes blue in the face.
There are some good melodic ideas in there. Just take it a lot slower. The recorder doesn't need to play continuously all the time. The lute can, because a lute player doesn't need to stop picking in order to breathe...
Try some longer notes, some shorter ones, and let the recorder pause from time to time. Just take the hand from the keyboard for a moment. The silence between the notes is important.