02-06-2017, 01:20 PM
(This post was last modified: 02-06-2017, 01:24 PM by Otto Halmén.
Edit Reason: Clarity
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Welcome aboard, Lord Thayer! 
Let me just say right away that you've certainly got the chops for this, so keep it up.
As to the piece:
+ Thematically, you're in the right place. It sounds like a call to adventure.
+ There's a nice variety in the instrumentation. By spreading out the winds and chromatic percussion along the different parts, you get a rich arrangement that hints at worldbuilding.
? The reverb sounds like a plate (no pre-delay, ultra-wide, slight pew sound on percussion attacks). Did you use OldSkoolVerb? I put a question mark because this is an unorthodox choice for modern works, but you MIGHT be able to pull off a retro Hollywood sound with it, if that's something you want to do.
- The woodwinds and brass don't have a whole lot of ambience, and sound a bit small and up close. Try bringing up the reverb (or just the early reflections if you feel that too much reverb kills the sound) a bit.
- The main melody lacks phrasing. Try singing the part by yourself to see where you would take small pauses to breathe, and play the parts accordingly. Singing something also helps you get a good feel of articulation (i.e. which notes should be long, short, emphasized, and so on).
Let me just say right away that you've certainly got the chops for this, so keep it up.
As to the piece:
+ Thematically, you're in the right place. It sounds like a call to adventure.
+ There's a nice variety in the instrumentation. By spreading out the winds and chromatic percussion along the different parts, you get a rich arrangement that hints at worldbuilding.
? The reverb sounds like a plate (no pre-delay, ultra-wide, slight pew sound on percussion attacks). Did you use OldSkoolVerb? I put a question mark because this is an unorthodox choice for modern works, but you MIGHT be able to pull off a retro Hollywood sound with it, if that's something you want to do.
- The woodwinds and brass don't have a whole lot of ambience, and sound a bit small and up close. Try bringing up the reverb (or just the early reflections if you feel that too much reverb kills the sound) a bit.
- The main melody lacks phrasing. Try singing the part by yourself to see where you would take small pauses to breathe, and play the parts accordingly. Singing something also helps you get a good feel of articulation (i.e. which notes should be long, short, emphasized, and so on).
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