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I mean something like this. Though of course with pillars or some other supports beneath the balcony.

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Make up a word all the great authors do. They strode onto the mezbalchanine that served as the second floor with its pleasing view of the ground floor. Suddenly a scream rang out...
I wonder if "gallery" would actually still work. Technically it's still a covered passage that is open at one side. You could even just write it out as "the second floor opened into a rectangular gallery in the center." Since gallery carries connotations of viewing or looking down from above. It's also possible that if you dig up the proper architectural term for it no one other than architects will understand it.

https://www.britannica.com/technology/gallery

If you search for images of "second floor gallery" you'll find a few that look like what you're describing.
Yeah, of all the different terms I've seen now it still seems the most fitting as it can apply to a variety of different things. I ended up writing

Quote:At the building’s center was a large dining room, the second floor opening up above to form a balustraded gallery, and the vaulted ceiling was adorned with mosaics.

but of course I can always change it later if need be.
Sounds good! Not as good as mezbalchanine of course, but quite good.
(02-11-2019, 09:19 PM)bigcat1969 Wrote: [ -> ]Sounds good! Not as good as mezbalchanine of course, but quite good.

Mezbalchanine sounds like an illegal substance.
Looong time since the last update, and most of that time has been spent coming up with and writing a parallel storyline that is supposed to be interwoven with the existing chapters. So without further ado, I present to you:

Chapter 3b (which goes between chapters 3 and 4 and will, once everything is done, become chapter 4)

I quickly gave up on the idea of having antagonist chapters, since they would reveal too much about the underlying plot. So I'm going with this. In fact, I think this slightly more laid back plotline works quite nicely with the adventuring and pure sword & sorcery elements. It kind of adds a bit of breathing room and contemplation.

Let me know what you think.
I just found out that the lingua franca of Westeros is called Common Tongue or Common, the exact same name as in Strands of Darkness. I'm trying to keep the GRRM associations to a minimum here (since no one's going to believe that I've only ever read the first book and gave up after that) so if you have any suggestions for a fitting term, I'm all ears.

Languagethateveryonespeaks?

Allblather?

Lowchew?
(03-16-2019, 12:32 AM)Mattias Westlund Wrote: [ -> ]I just found out that the lingua franca of Westeros is called Common Tongue or Common, the exact same name as in Strands of Darkness. I'm trying to keep the GRRM associations to a minimum here (since no one's going to believe that I've only ever read the first book and gave up after that) so if you have any suggestions for a fitting term, I'm all ears.

Languagethateveryonespeaks?

Allblather?

Lowchew?

Maybe it's an opportunity for you to expand the lore of your world a bit. You can decide if there is a language that is as pervasive as English is in real life and just use that. I'm sure you've got all kinds of historical background in your head regarding all the various nations in your world, so maybe one of those languages?

Or maybe something like "trade-speak" or some such. Figure there must be some trading going on so some kind of verbal communication has to have evolved around it for it to be successful.

I promise I'll catch up on reading, too. Chapter 3b is on the list...
You could call it Pidgin. A pidgin is basically a language made up of other languages, very similar to a creole. Which, now that I've said that, Creole wouldn't be a bad choice either. In the real world, actual trade languages are often pidgins or creoles when there is a diverse mix of other languages about. Paupau New Guinea is a good example.
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